This forum needs more activity. So here's a short-story...type... thing I wrote. Yeh, I was bored and didn't feel like drawing that Lugia at the time.
“HYAAH!” the blade came crashing down and I held up my own horizontally above my head, gritting my teeth to find the strength to keep the sharp assassin of my life at bay. I moved my weight with my small legs to my other foot, and pushed the sword away, jumping back slightly so I could stare into the face of my other self.
My taller reflection stared back as if I had grown another head. He frustrated me so much! I wasn’t exactly like him, like he had said. I did have a chance, and I was going to show him one way or the other. And funnily enough, he seemed to be having doubts about his earlier statements. I reached for my boomerang and bit my bottom lip. I had to win this, or else what chance did I have?
In one swift motion, the yellow projectile was out behind me, and the next second it was hurdling towards my green-tunicked partner. As he rose his shield in front of his face to block the boomerang, I dashed towards my opponent, sword ready. My small stature made it a synch to speed up to him and as he lowered his shield, my aim came up to the place where it was being lowered from.
But of course seeing as my opponent had quite a bit of practice, the attack was quickly diffused by a simple roll backwards, and as he did so he lit a bomb while I retrieved my boomerang from the air. Before I had a second thought, it was hurdling towards me, and the only place to go was forward or backward – the sides being a canyon seemingly with no bottom. And so not liking my choices, I bent my knees and jumped over it towards him.
...do you want me to be nice or give my honest opinion? :XD:
It sorta reminds me of Zelda: The Phantom Hourglass. ^_^
It's an interesting idea, and you write action well. However, it's rather confusing - why on earth is this fight happening? You could lengthen it to explain just what's going on - why is the assassin after your life? Beyond that, there's some awkward phrasing. For example, "sharp assassin of my life" sounds really clunky and weird. So does "my taller reflection."
The idea is really to make you think and fill in the blanks yourself. ^_^ I think. At least that's what I was going for... :sweatdrop:
*Hooh251 doesn't see how a taller reflection is clunky but I guess that's cuz he's a clunky person. XD
Yeah, I needed a better word than sword <.< >.>
*Hooh251 is done making excuses
*Hooh251 goes back to his hole.